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Words To Ash

My embers burn / A dark fire roars
My suicidal war / A blaze of words

I wrote this for you...
The old me really wanted you to read it
To tell you the truth...
Of how I came to be beyond broken

But I had to keep it
Because I'll never see you again
So my wounds remain hidden
A letter deprived of hate, I forgave us in vain

I'm trying to undo what you have done
Even if its just a placebo effect
This is me trying to “move on”
From this smothering resentment
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Confessions turn into infernos
You crushed my faith
A villain disguised as a hero
My lungs starts to shake
The sinner is attending church tomorrow
While this saint is endlessly praying for strength
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My soul surges / A red sky clears
My resolve emerges / A cure for tears

I've journeyed through the flames...
The new me knows the reasons for your trespasses
And the way you try and cleanse your internal shame
You are the reaper of innocence

Closure drawn from a scarred heart
I will not stay in your prison
No more nights spent awake in the dark
I will not serve your sentence

The raging fires in my eyes finally burnt out
I will set ablaze the pain that was once bound
And these ashes of yours will fall down
...Scattering justice...all around...
Even though I know you won't read this
This is for you, Ash
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Stock image - fav.me/d29apnw
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This poem is written for my project, titled "The Prodigy's Suicide"
In volume six: My Letters To No One
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Shadowkat678 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing work...wow, just wow...
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ thank you for the kind comment. It means a lot. :D
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tinyqueen007 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Student Writer
Oh wow...your writing is deep :) great job
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. <3
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tinyqueen007 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Student Writer
U welcome :)
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BirdsistersStock Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013   Photographer
looks great and powerful words! thanks for using our stock!
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank YOU for providing the stock. <3
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Sinnomangirl Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This one is my favorite.
"All you have is a life that is ready to break"
I like it!
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. This one is very close to me. So I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D
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dj-dreemz Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
This is so intensely real and personal I am sure many will pause and hesitate to comment with any depth...but that is it's power, the fact it hits the heart...beat.... pause and say 'whoa'.....because you dared share an experience many of us have had....but few so openly speak.....thank you
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for this wonderful comment. Sorry it took me so long to respond, it's been quite the week or two since the last time we spoke.
I'm so glad you found this to your liking. This poem is very close to me, and it helped me out during a rough period time in my life.
<3
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow...simply wow. This piece is amazing. :D
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you Aaron! :D

This was one of those "must" write poems. There's a lot of truth behind it. It carries a lot of meaning with it.
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I could see that. I really love the power you put into this piece. You are such a wonderful writer! :D
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kartiksharma Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Student General Artist
Its just beautifullll!!!!!
This is by far the best piece I have ever seen from you!
Marvelous!
This is pretty amazing!!
Good Job done there! :)


If it interests you, please have a look : [link]
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much.
And nice writing, keep it up. :)
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leppakakaklifoth Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
very nice
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The imagery is very nice, and apocalyptic.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, now that you mention it, I guess it could come off as kind of apocalyptic.
I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you.
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TryingJustHardEnough Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow this is good
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
Thank you.
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threwthedoor Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my god the opening lines were great.

And then the rest was just a rant broken into stanzas. I like that it speaks of both burden and freedom, but, would it kill people to use a little allegory or metaphors? Bah, whatever, hide this comment, block me, call me a "hater", whatever. I should have learned my lesson by now but I never do.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree, the opening lines are good. ;)
And the rest was meant to be a rant. But, about the whole 'lacking' of metaphors is just I'm a sellout. When I did use tons and tons of metaphors, the people who would be reading my work wouldn't really 'get' or 'understand' what it was about. So it came to a turning point where I just use less metaphors and more emotion to tell a story, paint a picture with words, or whatever you want to call it. So thank you for your opinion, I thought I'd just shed some light on that, and hope you get what I mean.
:)
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LoopyWolf Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Professional General Artist
sadly, words are often just like this: ash, and blown in your face
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, speak the truth- you do.
Speaking in yoda, I am.

I don't know why.....But thank you! XD
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EmoTemo Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I LOVE IT <3
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ME TOO! <3
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EmoTemo Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yayy. :dance:
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IveGotTalent Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i sneezed when i saw the pic, lol




very nice poem
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol!

Well thank you. <3
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Akasha63 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012
:heart:
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<3 <3 <3
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Ashes-to-Ashes1408 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012
(first, i was drawn to this because it had my nickname in it.) this poem is really good. i really loved the style and flow of the whole piece. and gosh some of the lines were just amazing. Like your closing lines. its got epic imagery.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
The closing lines is what I like most about it. So I'm happy to see someone else express the same interest. Thank you! <3
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AmuletDiamond Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012
Could explain how I feel almost every day after that. Great poem.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awwww, well I hope the days in the future will look up, I know this is something that relates to a lot of hurt.
And it's supposed to be that little push towards courage.
*hugs*
Thank you.
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CoRkY97 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
When your poetry evokes emotion in the reader, you know your doing something right :D
Great job, I absolutely adore this poem! <3
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) You clearly have a good point there. Thank you so much for your compliment. It means a lot. <3
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CoRkY97 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
No problem :D
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anime-art-freak579 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012
Lovely. c:
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
I'm glad you liked it, thank you. <3
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anime-art-freak579 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012
You're very welcome. :>
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BlackRoses45 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
If I could I would favorite this a thousand times. It's exactly what I am going through right now.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, well I'm so happy that you really thought it was that worthy. It means a lot, it really does. Thank you.
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BlackRoses45 Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome :)
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Po-bo Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Student Photographer
Amazing job! I loved it!!
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
I'm very happy that you liked this. :D
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