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Dear mother, dear father
Dear brother, dear sister


Don't worry, you still have each other
And without me you're all so much stronger
Leave me behind and let me go, I promise the days will get brighter

Dear teachers, dear counselors
Dear therapists, dear doctors


You have my gratitude for what you all did
But I hit rock bottom too many times, and this last one was it
The end of the road again, as if no one could have kept me from a coffin
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I was not fit to live life
I failed at everything, every time
I sincerely did my very best, I really tried
I just could no longer stand feeling so powerless inside

I lay wide awake every night
I prayed and prayed and asked "why?"
I was always silently drowning in the tears I cried
I am done with suffering, so this is where I draw the line

This is the end
One with a resentful beginning
It all came crashing down to nothing
It's what's only right, so I know what I'm doing
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Dear friends, dear betrayers
Dear relatives, dear deserters


I must have been too meaningless
While you all just stood by and watched, motionless
But I guess no one wants to try and help someone who is beyond broken

Dear heroes, dear villains
Dear angels, dear demons


You hurt me, and you also saved me
It became a damaging cycle that dragged on endlessly
I couldn't take it anymore, I was just holding on so hopelessly
I'm defeating my destiny, I'm ending my fate, this is how it all must be
The pen finally broke
From all the pain I wrote
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:iconmidna27:
midna27 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Artist
awsome as usual dude.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm just so glad you enjoyed this one. :D It means a lot.
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midna27 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Student Artist
i like your poetry. its alot better than mine i tell ya.
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LoveYourPrinny Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
The final verse where you address the heroes and villains is so poignant, it really rung out to me.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It was really hard to end it, so I feel a sense of relief that someone has said that. Thank you.
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TheInvisble Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like it, especially the title but I don't like how you said friends and betrayers in the same dear thingy and what you wrote about them but other then that it good.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I agree about that. It's just I ran out of space for more ( I try and keep within a page length limit for every poem)
Thank you for your feedback.
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TheInvisble Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Meh, longer's okay. Especially with that many skippy lines thingys. You know when you press the enter key.

Why fear?
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mysteryAphrodite Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
please don't die~ there are people who love and care for you
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:iconimmortalizedlies:
ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry
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mysteryAphrodite Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
phew...
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NorthStarIo Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Student Writer
Dude, I suffer from bi-polar and I sometimes feel like a toilet with all the pills I willingly flush down my throat. I am also I writer and have been lost in darkness where there is seemingly no light to reach for. You can tell, for I I'd like to know, did you plan on killing yourself after you wrote this?
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's kind of a -too- personal question to answer, sorry. I wish I could give you a straight answer, but I can't or don't want to.
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NorthStarIo Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
I completely understand man. I know, as soon as you speak a word your world unfolds. I wish you the best of luck and to stay strong, for others know pain too.
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Rylee211 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Student Artisan Crafter
Welcome to my life.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:'(
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:iconrylee211:
Rylee211 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Artisan Crafter
:tears:
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DarkLondonDreams Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is so tragically beautiful. It's deep...i really do like it.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm relieved that some people liked this.
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kyua0100 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012
I love this kind of style. Sad..
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's a first that someone has said they liked my style :P
Thank you.
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
dark man... dark. :O
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, well I apologize if it was too dark. I was really just going to delete this one when I wrote it last month. I came back to it and changed a few things here and there, and decided to try and upload it. x,x
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Aaron-Jay Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
no... suicide notes are supposed to be dark so you catured what you sought out for very nicely. Just... wow... dark-darkness... :O
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lizardbeth2626 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully tragic.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's what I have been trying to aim for. I'm relieved some people thought that. Thank you. :)
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lizardbeth2626 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Grinewild Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Such a beautiful piece of art.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, that means a lot. :)
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