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Plead For Release

God, I hope I'm doing this right
I was never really one for praying
God, Please look at me in my eyes
I'm sorry, I'm just so sorry for everything
Even though I'm just another one of your creations
I wonder why I was born surrounded by destruction

I know nothing of your pity
But I still want to try and believe in thee

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I crumble down to my knees
And I beg of you, please

Destroy every nightmare that I have ever slept
Break and shatter every mirror in existence
So I don't have to dream of what I've become to be
So I don't have to see what has finally become of me

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God, I was never really one for confrontations
But this is where I have to draw the line in life
Because hearing the truth is like learning an important lesson
Just like when I was told that it's all okay, it's okay to cry
Because everything just seems to happen for a reason
But now I know nothing, nothing except grief
I just hope this life of pain is not an inheritance
Because I've become so sick, oh-so-sick of this reality

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Remove every scar that has ever been shown
Dry up every tear that has ever been drawn
So I will never again bleed
So I will never again grieve

You need to take it all away
I want these memories of mine erased

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God, I was never really one to ask for forgiveness
But I no longer have anyone standing by my side
God, I said I was truly sorry for my weakness
I need you to at least give me some kind of sign
Even though I am just one person
You must know I am only human

I know nothing of peace
But yet, that's not stopping me from trying to plead for release
God, this is my life's outcome
God, let my pain be undone
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Eehli Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Student Writer
filled my body emotion, made me cry and gave me goose bumps...
Very powerful piece of work
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, well I hope you enjoyed it.
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Eehli Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Student Writer
i did :3 very much
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donttuchme Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2012  Student Digital Artist
this is very good like always.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
It's a re-write, but I kept the original ending. Just because I loved the ending so much :P
It was so hard placing everything, it was all jumbled around, and it's a much larger poem than the last version. But all in all, I hope it fits, and makes sense. :D That's all that mattered to me.
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donttuchme Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Student Digital Artist
It very good. i would of never thought of writing that way. i get what a lot of it and its very good
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Liz-Elane97 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
Beautiful. The words pop off the screen with so much meaning :)
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
I'm so happy you enjoyed this one. I did the best I could with it. So thank you a ton! <3
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Liz-Elane97 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
My pleasure :) I really did enjoy it :)
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DojangDoll Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is a lovely poem. The message and the words really speak to me, and I appreciate for you writing them down.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Awww, thank you so much. It was really hard to write, I just couldn't get the words to fit in the right places. I kept switching some sections. So I'm glad you found it to your liking. :D
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DojangDoll Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I can imagine. It seems like a fairly complex poem to keep track of.
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0L50NJ4 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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wow.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, thanks. :D
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0L50NJ4 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
^_^
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missaquaitaine Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I just have one question on my mind and that is this; Do you believe in Him?

This is a great poem, and the honesty shows through with stunning clarity. You don't have to plead for release, he already did that a long time ago. And he released you [from bondage] when His son died on the cross for you, for all of us. Myself included. You may know this already and in that case I'm just reminding you. If you didn't, well Now you know! ;)

Watch this great video~ It may not be the same problem, but I think this is a great video that you might need to see. [link]
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not a believer, and I apologize for the inconvenience. This is just a poem, a concept from my imagination. Sure there's some truth in it, but it's altered to the point where I can only see it. I don't have anything against religion, or anything, this is just fiction.
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missaquaitaine Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Mmm. Ok. Sorry if I was a little pushy on the whole "christianity" thing. I'm trying to be more bold, yet subtle about it. And I think a good way to do that is on the internet. Did you like the video though? That I gave you a link to?
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