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Oceanfall

One final leap into the depths below is all it really takes
Open my lungs up, and let freezing freedom take my breath away
I did my time here on Earth, I served my time in life
So now I'm done, it's over, I no longer need to be alive
I've seen what cannot be unseen, I've done what I cannot undo
I cannot change the past, and the future is what I cannot live through

Splash

DOWN

Down

down

A watery grave is what I have dreamed of, it's all I have ever really wanted
A slow, and silent decent, it's an honor to finally become one of the departed
My eyes unknowingly darken, as I instantly try to grasp onto the last of the light
Realizing this is the last time I'll see through my human body, it's such a beautiful sight
But crying underwater seems like it's impossible to do, so I'll still try my best to defy the odds
Because I know I've felt all of the different kinds of pain, so this is me letting go of what I've got  

Numbing

FADE

Fade

fade

I suddenly feel all of the world's weight pressing down on me, crushingly
It's like every burden in existence is burying me, completely
I feel every tear of every soul showering me, peacefully
All of that invisible hurt is entering me, such agony
Pulling me down deeper and deeper, please hurry
I don't regret this, but I'm still so sorry

Panic

REACH

Reach

reach

I close my eyes, and all I hear is the echo of bubbles escaping their way to the surface
My body can no longer feel anything, but it seems that my soul still has some purpose
It's so calm now, I can't tell if I'm still lingering, this is a different kind of peace
But I guess this must be it, this is what death is like, when you let the pain finally cease
Letting go, to move on, it's something we all must do at one point or another
Moving on, to let go, because no human should ever have to suffer

Death

DROWN

Drown

drown
*Queue's Extreme Ways*

I'm tired, too tired
Too long have I suffered

Let me drown, let me finally leave
Cease my breathing, just to gain my peace

For my project - "The Prodigy's Suicide"
In volume two: The Dark Rapture

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Im-buried-alive Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012
Damn!!! that was awesome! That is really deep and dark,love it man.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
Well I'm so glad that you enjoyed this one that much. It was really different writing this poem. Thank you for your enthusiasm. It lifted my spirit up when I read this.
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midna27 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Student Artist
this pic reminds me of this song:[link]
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, I really like that song. It's my first time listening to it. Thank you for sharing it with me. :D
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midna27 Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Student Artist
Your welcome!! Intension by tool is a good song to.
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uganija Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Hobbyist
i must say it took me away from my seat in front of the computer into that deep water :)! i enjoyed reading this, really great effect!
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:)
Sorry for the late response.
I'm surprised it had that effect :P
This was one of those 'in the moment' type poems, I wrote it after I saw this movie, and it probably took about an hour to finalize everything. This was a fun one to write, in my mind, I pictured myself in that situation and thought of what it would be like. And this is what I came up with in the end. <3 Thank you.
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uganija Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist
it's ok :) and yes for me it did have the effect and it's something not everyone can achieve :)
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peoshade Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
it's so sad and beautiful ... i like it :)
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's what I was aiming for ^.^ So glad you like it. :D
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HikariNoMelody Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012
Its not that you cease breathing, nor is it that you ever drown in the sea,
It is just that you hold your breath for eternity.
The pain will cease, you heart will stop beating,
but you can always feel the caress of the ocean swaying.
Be cocooned in its cold, numbing emrace and let it take
take all your fears, your pains for your sake
Let everything wash away, off to some unknown shore
Let the tide wash over you, hold your breath for an eternity more

this reminds me of a poem I wrote a while ago too. speaking of which I should edit right about now... But beautiful poem :D
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I wanna read it! What's the title?
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HikariNoMelody Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012
Its called Forever at Sea.
I wrote it after I came across a poem from four years ago about the ocean :D
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laurotica Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012   Writer
I quite enjoyed reading this...it's not like many other poems I've come across on this website. Wonderful :clap:
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It is kind of different, right? :P It sort of just fell into place. I'm glad you enjoyed this. :D
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CauterizeSetsFire Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012   General Artist
Beautifull!
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) I'm so happy that you liked it. Thank you.
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CauterizeSetsFire Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012   General Artist
:aww:
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TheVulpes Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I Like how you did this. nice
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! That means so much to me. :D <3
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ShuyinTheEnigmatic Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
Wow....... Such a beautiful piece of literature. Well done.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for taking the time to read this poem. I'm very relieved people like it. :)
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ShuyinTheEnigmatic Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
You're very welcome.
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WritingxSQUIRRELxFTW Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely beautiful, and I will agree with ~ShyGirlShark: I love the emotion put into it, however... don't give up, please.

I'm always here if you need to talk. :heart:
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you squirrelly ^.^ It took forever to get it write, but I'm glad this one is over with, it's one of my personal favorites now. :)

*hugs*
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WritingxSQUIRRELxFTW Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome ^.^ I really like this one...

...but I like every one, so.

:)

:hug:s back
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ShyGirlShark Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012
This is wonderful. I love the emotion you've put in.
But please don't give up. Keep trying : )
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much ^.^ I'm happy that you enjoyed this. :)
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ShyGirlShark Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012
You are very welcome : )
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lilandy676 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
really great stuff love how it all falls into place
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I know, right?
I had a lot of fun writing this one, even though it was kind of difficult. I look forward to seeing what kind of response it gets from others in the on coming hours of today. Thank you for taking the time to read and watch and favorite, and comment and all that, it means a lot, it really does. :)
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lilandy676 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
ya it would mean alot if u would take a look at some of my poems but u dont have to
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'll be sure to get around that soon. I promise.
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lilandy676 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
thnx that means the world to me :hug:
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Professional Writer
I do like how you ended this, with a concrete style that suggests going under. Overall, a Classic waiting to be made.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^.^ I know, I had a lot of trouble finalizing it, took like 3 hours. I had this concept in mind of going down

down
down
down

with the poem and lines, and so on, it just sort of wrote itself over time.... :)

Thank you. :D
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Indeed, even many of MY works wrote and ended themselves.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sounds interesting 0.0 I'll have to check out your gallery soon!
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Welcome, young'un!
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ILoveEdwardRichtofen Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow that's wonderful!
Great work (: Keep it up!~ xx
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^.^ Thank you so much, I'm very happy that you enjoyed this! :D <3
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ILoveEdwardRichtofen Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're very welcome! :D <3
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