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Frozen Whirlpool

Somewhere...in the ocean
There is a whirlpool...that is...frozen

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I no longer had anything keeping me bound to this world
You were my love, you were my chain, and my heart was a link
And I couldn't bear the thought of never seeing your face anymore
So my knees gave, as I let my thoughts break, and I forced myself to sink
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Somewhere...in the darkness
There is a soul...which became faithless

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All those memories down the drain
I feel the bitterness of hope
While my tears rain
I cannot cope
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Somewhere...in the depths
There is a spark...cradled by emptiness

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My pain will always remain in time
As I never wanted to let you go
But I still got left behind
Only to dwell in remorse
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Somewhere...along the path
Came a point...where I couldn't stand

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I knew there would be no moving on
And there would be no going back
Because I can't stand the thought
Of potentially losing any of that
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Somewhere...in my mind
There is a time...when I loved my life

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Never have I been this hurt
Feeling this massacre in my heart
This is a level of damage I haven't faced before
It's as if the ruins of my shattered core got torn apart
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And somewhere...within the sea
There is a broken heart...that belongs to...me
There is no justice for lost hope
There is no redemption when one lets go
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"The Prodigy's Suicide"
In volume two: The Dark Rapture

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YuukiNatsumiYagami Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i love the whole thing but i especially love the ending with that impact
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Heh, well thank you so much, I'm glad the ending had an impact for you, because that's what I was aiming for! :P
<3
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YuukiNatsumiYagami Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome!! you definitely succeeded!=)
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Xsavor Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautiful ending <3
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I tried to make the ending as best as possible :P
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NoriMori Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
Holy shit, this is amazing. I could really feel the raw pain in this, like it oozed out of the screen and wrapped around my heart and gave it an icy squeeze.
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the support! :) You have no idea how much that means to me.
And I'm really glad you liked this poem that much :P
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NoriMori Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
By "the support" do you mean butting heads with Thelema down there or just saying that I like the poem? :P
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ImmortalizedLies Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Butting heads :P Yes.
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NoriMori Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012
Lol, no problem. I just can't stand such massive jerkfaces.
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